Mostly present tense, except for some strange places like:
Three knocks emanated from just outside the front door.
I did have a hard time understanding what was happening the first time through. I think the second time through was easier because 1. I already had a vague idea what was happening, 2. I did "select all" and that blocked out the light-colors-on-white text, reducing everything to a neutral white-on-blue. (I realize now that there was missing text that was colored white that I just hadn't seen -- it's hard to understand a story if you don't read all of it.)
"E is.", Mike says colloquially.
Boss releases Spencer, who promptly looks back at Mike with a facial expression of complete lack of comprehension.
"You are.", Mike says equally colloquially.
I think "nonchalantly" or "matter-of-factly" might fit better here.
Re: Response
Three knocks emanated from just outside the front door.
I did have a hard time understanding what was happening the first time through. I think the second time through was easier because 1. I already had a vague idea what was happening, 2. I did "select all" and that blocked out the light-colors-on-white text, reducing everything to a neutral white-on-blue. (I realize now that there was missing text that was colored white that I just hadn't seen -- it's hard to understand a story if you don't read all of it.)
"E is.", Mike says colloquially.
Boss releases Spencer, who promptly looks back at Mike with a facial expression of complete lack of comprehension.
"You are.", Mike says equally colloquially.
I think "nonchalantly" or "matter-of-factly" might fit better here.
Ethan